跟Simon考官学写小作文之柱形图

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很多人对《剑9》这道题感到困惑,向我寻求帮助:

供大家参考四段式写作框架:
开头:用自己的话改写问题陈述。

概述:指出哪一类在哪一年最高,哪一类最低,哪一类变化最大

细节段:比较1995年的三个分类数据,然后说明1999年前发生的变化。

细节段:注意local call1999年后的变化,将local call和其他两类进行比较。通过2002年数据间的比较进行总结。

This is my report
The bar chart compares the amount of time spent by people in the UK on three different types of phone call between 1995 and 2002.

It is clear that calls made via local, fixed lines were the most popular type, in terms of overall usage, throughout the period shown. The lowest figures on the chart are for mobile calls, but this category also saw the most dramatic increase in user minutes.

In 1995, people in the UK used fixed lines for a total of just over 70 billion minutes for local calls, and about half of that amount of time for national or international calls. By contrast, mobile phones were only used for around 4 billion minutes. Over the following four years, the figures for all three types of phone call increased steadily.

By 1999, the amount of time spent on local calls using landlines had reached a peak at 90 billion minutes. Subsequently, the figure for this category fell, but the rise in the other two types of phone call continued. In 2002, the number of minutes of national / international landline calls passed 60 billion, while the 
figure for mobiles rose to around 45 billion minutes.
(197 words, band 9)

开头中常犯的错误

你能找出并改正下面开头中犯的错误吗?想想为什么这些是常见的错误?

The bar chart illustrates that the trend of call types in the united kingdom for 8 years from 1995 to 2002.

The bar chart compares the figures in terms of minutes spent on telephone calls, splitted into three types.

The bar chart gives information about telephone calls. It is in three types Local, National & International and Mobile call minutes from year 1995 to 2002 in UK.

The graph compares the total using time of 3 call types in the UK over a 7-year period from 1995.

The bar chart presents the amount of phone calls in billion of minutes make in the UK over a period of seven years into the categories of local, national/international and mobile phone calls.

为了避免这些错误,你可以让你的开头尽量简洁:
The bar chart compares the amount of time spent by people in the UK on three different types of phone call between 1995 and 2002.

学会使用搭配搭配就是单词的组合,我敢保证你用过“increase siginificantly”,下面是我最近写的例文中一些经典的小作文搭配。

amount of time
the time spent on
in terms of
throughout the period
the period shown
a dramatic increase in
increased steadily
reached a peak
the figure for
the rise in

以及关于“phone calls”的搭配:
local calls
national calls
international calls
fixed line / landline calls
mobile calls
overall usageuser minutes

Tip: 可以试试online Oxford Collocations Dictionary.

概述不是结论

注意在雅思小作文中你不应该写“结论”而是写“概述”。不过为什么你不能写结论呢?结论和概述间有什么区别呢?

首先,结论是总的判断,决定和观点。你可以在大作中很好地使用结论,但是你需要在小作文中写不带任何观点的描述。另一方面,概述仅仅是对要点的简单描述,它是对图表中信息的汇总。
其次,结论应该在每篇文章末尾。概述既可以在文章末尾也可以在靠近开头的位置。个人而言,推荐大家在你文章开头不远处描述图表的主要特征。

所以,我推荐的小作文框架应该是这样的:
Introduction: what does the chart show?Overview / summary: what are the most noticeable features?
Specific details: try to write 2 paragraphs.



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